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Subject:   Re: check my essayyyyy
Name:   MIKE
Date Posted:   Nov 7, 06 - 11:35 PM
Message:   You should get a high 7.0 for this writing.

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There is No doubt [about] that poverty is one of the major problems of the world today. Poverty is an alarm bell for the economy of many developing countries. So I believe rich nations should support poorer nations TO alleviatE [of] poverty[ for these].
Firstly, we all are living in a global village era. THUS, it is the duty of all to help each other, whatever the circumstances are. So if the superpowers of the world stand with developing nations, it would certainly strengthEN the bond between them. Moreover, it brings [the] peace, fraternity and harmony among the world.
In addition, rich countries should help poor ones for their own sake. As poverty arises, the tendency to migrate to wealthy nations arises too. Certainly, it brings lot of headacheS for them. The problemS like unemployment, health, etc. will NEGATIVELY IMPACT ON their annual budget.
Furthermore, developed nations can exploit this situation in their favor. By the financing OF underdeveloped countries, they can utilize their natural recourses and get the profits for A great deal. Surely, it helps the economy of poor nations. More and more bilateral trade will help this cause too.
However, it is not an ideal approach to rely on THE aid of rich countries. The govERNMENT. should itself UNDERSTAND the situation well and plan to dig out this evil. THE GovERNMENT should put lot of stress on professional education and agricultural sectors. In turn, it will prove ONE OF THE most useful steps against poverty.
In conclusion,[ to mulling over this issue,] I think both rich nations and THE govERNMENT should require a great contribution towards this problem and corresponding infrastructure
   


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